Friday, July 16, 2010

Fictitious Friday

Today I dub: "Fictitious Friday". I have decided that every Friday I will post a wee snippet of fiction and ask you find ladies (and perhaps the occasional gentleman) what you think.

So here it is:

Close your eyes. Imagine me fair and charming and wearing nothing but socks. Watch as my long blond hair is caught in the wind, whipping around my face, sticking to my lips. I brush it away with my hand; long fingers, bright yellow nail polish.

I am sitting on a cliff surrounded by ferns and evergreens, overlooking a river, deep in the forest. My legs are bent up to my chest; and I rest my chin on my knees.

I look down at the rushing water; my eyes are a pale blue etched with a ring of green around the irises. So I close them. Because they are startling; and people look twice. And I don’t want them to. I don’t want them to see me at all. But you, I want you to see me.

See me: I don’t wear any make up. See my lashes are gold fans resting on pink cheeks. See my lips parted, my hands clasped around my knees. Do you find me beautiful? I hope so. I hope you notice how long my limbs are, how full my lips are, and how the freckles on my right arm form the shape of a star. I hope you notice that my skin is luminous and my socks are plain white tube socks.

Now, what do you think?

Also, feel free to tell me I am cuter than cute. Better yet, feel free to tell me my baby is cuter than cutest cute. Because I would be okay with that.

outfit details:

skirt, rw & co. thrifted: $3
shirt, joe fresh style: $12
scarf, thrifted: $4
shoes, thrifted: $4
glasses, vera wang via

Heart: Kimberellie


  1. Oh, your baby boy is absolutely cuter than cutest. But he got good genes: His mother is obviously cute and I've seen a few shots of the father to know he's not lacking in the looks department, either!

    I love the way you mix patterns. Too much is never enough.

    And you're being a bit saucy with the fiction, are you not? Nothing but tube socks on the lady? It sort of reminded me of a short story I once read about a water nymph tempting some poor sap for weeks on end and then drowning him. Except the sock part. It was a beautiful story, actually...was what you posted part of, a larger story, or just a random snippet in your head you had to get down?

  2. I really like the calm, simple images of your writing. And the rhetorical question insertion - "Do you find me beautiful?" - really adds another dimension and brings the reader in. I think you are very talented with fiction writing! :)

    And I love the watercolor colors of your outfit! Your son is so precious. :)

    Erin :)

  3. 2 things.

    1 - I am really interested in your writing style. It is different and I am interested to find out what happens next in your story.

    2 - That is my favourite skirt of yours.

  4. I've been noticing a theme in your outfits lately...loving the mixed prints!
    Yes you and Baby are cuter than cute!
    And your fiction snippet leaves me wanting to read more...I'm sooo are very talented..I wish I could write like you!!

  5. I like your writing style too. It was sort of like experiencing those images. And like Natasha, it left me wanting to read more.

    This skirt is so pretty. I'm jealous.

  6. I am transfixed by your writing....more, please!
    I adore the skirt and how cutie baby co-ordinates so well.

  7. If you wrote a book, I would definitely buy it. And also, great print mixing. Oh, and, again, cute baby!!

  8. Your little boy is cuter than cute!

    You can definitely write a book.

  9. Love the skirt! And really, the whole outfit is adorable and different. Cute, cute, cute.

  10. i love it. it's like the beginning of a fantasy novel... i love fantasy/scifi...

    and you are both cuter than the cutest cute!

  11. Hi, thanks for your comment and following!
    I really love the pattern on this skirt.. i think it is my new love! :)

  12. I love your pose. Sometimes it's better to keep a good thing going. :)

    I recently realized that I think our babies are around the same age. Mine's 16 months (March birthday).


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